Ⅰ 外刊输入——悟语言之道
Mornings on the Internet
Karl and Dorsey Gude of Michigan can remember simpler mornings. They sat together chatting as they ate breakfast. They read the newspaper, made fun of each other and competed only with the television.
That was so last century. These days, Mr. Gude wakes at 6：00 am to check his work email and his Facebook account. The two boys, Cole and Erik, start each morning with text messages, video games and Facebook.
The new routine quickly became a source of conflict in the family, with Ms. Gude complaining that technology was eating into family time. But ultimately (最终) even she gave in, opening her laptop and surfing on the Internet after breakfast.
“Things that I thought were upsetting and unacceptable a few years ago are now commonplace in my house，” she said. “ We are always online on four computers in four separate rooms whenever we wake up.”
This family is not alone. In May, Gabrielle Glaser of New Jersey, bought her 14yearold daughter, Moriah, an Apple laptop for her convenience. In the weeks after, Moriah missed the school bus three times and went from walking the family dog for 20 minutes each morning to only briefly letting the dog outside.
Moriah blames network functions, which draws her online as soon as she wakes. “Now that I have some friends that are up early and chatting，” she said. “I want to keep them company.”
This is typical in the US in the Internet age. People are increasingly waking up and rushing for access to their cellphones and laptops, sometimes even before swinging their legs to the floor and tending to more biologically urgent activities—like the bathroom.
Both adults and children have good reasons to wake up and immediately start clicking to keep track of the updates. Parents might need to go through email from colleagues in different time zones. Children check text messages and blogs or Facebook posts from friends with different bedtimes—and sometimes forget their chores in the process.
Is this really of benefit to us? It remains to be confirmed.
1.重点词汇再现
(1)chat v． 聊天
(2)make fun of 取笑
(3)account n. 账号
(4)surf v. 浏览
(5)upset v. 使烦恼
(6)convenience n. 方便
(7)network n. 网络
(8)function n. 功能
(9)now that 既然；由于
(10)keep sb. company 陪伴某人
(11)access n. (使用的)机会
(12)click v. 点击
(13)keep track of 掌握……的最新消息
(14)update n. 更新
(15)go through 通读
(16)blog n. 博客
(17)post n. 帖子
(18)benefit n. 益处
(19)confirm v. 确认
2．重点句型再现：whenever引导时间状语从句
We are always online on four computers in four separate rooms whenever we wake up.
无论什么时候我们醒来，我们总是在四个独立房间的四台电脑上上网。
Ⅱ 迷你语料库(Mini Corpus)
序号 | 佳句呈现 | 赏析 |
1 | There are countless articles telling us① how the Internet has made our lives more convenient②. | ①此处为there be sb./sth. doing sth.句型，其中telling 为动词ing 短语作定语，修饰名词articles。②how 引导的宾语从句，其中可以积累的语块made our lives more convenient 为“make＋宾语＋宾语补足语”结构，其中由more convenient 形容词的比较级充当宾语补足语。 |
2 | Jan Tchamani, an English teacher in Birmingham①， UK, suddenly developed② a serious illness and had to quit her job. | 描写人物境况突然变得恶劣。①同位语，解释说明人物。 ②develop 熟词生义，意为“患病”。 |
3 | At age 50, she found herself out of work and stuck at home① with only her computer to keep her company②. | 具体描写糟糕的人物处境。①用到了“find＋宾语＋宾语补足语”结构，其中宾语补足语由“out of work” 和“stuck at home”充当。②为“with＋宾语＋宾语补足语”结构，其中宾语补足语由“to keep her company”充当。 |
4 | After a while, she discovered that surfing the Internet could help her feel less lonely and bored. | 描写网络的积极作用。“surfing the Internet”为动词ing短语作主语。 |
5 | She could listen to music, watch films, play games, and explore the world. | 具体描写上网的活动。 |
6 | She also joined an online group where she could talk about her problems and get support and advice from others. | 具体描写网上的活动及获得的好处。where引导的定语从句，修饰an online group。 |
7 | She realised that one of the greatest benefits① of the Internet was its ability to remove the distance② that usually exists between people. | 描写上网活动的最大益处之一。 ①“one of ＋ 名词复数”，意为“……之一”；②its ability to do sth.意为“做某事的能力”，其中to do 不定式作定语。 |
8 | She was so inspired by the people she met online that she decided to start an IT club① to teach older people② how to use computers and the Internet③. | 描写受到启发决定帮助年长的人群学习如何使用电脑和网络。①为so...that...句型，意为“如此……以至于……”，引导结果状语从句。②to do不定式作目的状语。③“how to do”结构作宾语，其他疑问词也可以与to do构成类似的结构。 |
9 | Now that he works and can take care of himself, his daughter has time to study at university. | 描写家庭中人和人的相处。“now that”意为“既然；由于”，引导原因状语从句。 |
10 | She no longer feels lonely, and her company has become quite successful. | 描写人物心情及状况的转变。 |
11 | Jan has started taking online classes to learn more about how to use the Internet to make society better. | 通过动作描写叙述人物情况的改变。 |
12 | She believes that it is highly important to bridge the digital divide and make sure that everyone has access to the Internet and knows how to use new technology. | 描写年长人群学习新技术并接触网络的必要性。在it is highly important to do sth.中，it 为形式主语，真正的主语为“to bridge the digital divide and make sure that...”。其中，divide为熟词生义，此处词性为名词，意为“分歧”；have access to意为“有机会接触”。 |
13 | Her next goal is to start a charity website to raise money for children in poor countries. | 描写将来的目标。特别注意：如果主语是goal/aim/target等表示“目标”的词汇，需要用to do 不定式作表语。积累语块：raise money意为“筹钱”。 |
14 | When you go through tough times, you meet others who are facing similar challenges. | 描写遇到共患难的人。积累语块：go through意为“经历”；晚学词汇：tough意为“困难的”，可以用difficult替换。 |
15 | Thinking about other people's situation inspired me to offer help. | 描述感同身受激励“我”乐于提供帮助。 |
16 | Don't post comments or click on anything. | 恰当使用网络的劝告。 |
17 | Being online is no excuse for being rude, and you don't want to become a target for a troll or cyberbully. | 动词ing短语作主语，谓语动词一定要用单数形式；troll意为“发挑衅帖子的人”；cyberbully 意为“网霸”。 |
18 | Like a troll, a cyberbully will also write something mean but it is usually directed at particular people. | 具体描写什么是网霸。mean为熟词生义，意为“刻薄的”； direct at意为“针对”。 |
19 | However, the more polite you are, the less likely it is you will be attacked. | 描写礼貌的重要性。此处用到了the＋比较级．.. the＋比较级．..句型，意为“越……就越……”。 |
Ⅲ 读后续写入门篇：令人印象深刻的结尾
一篇文章的结尾不仅能够揭示故事的解决，还能够和前文呼应，使整篇文章成为一个有机的整体。一个令人印象深刻的结尾，往往能够在读后续写中起到画龙点睛的作用。所以，在结尾中，往往需要用经典句式和晚学词汇，由人见品质，由事及道理，起到点明中心，升华主题的作用。
精彩结尾欣赏：
1．Love may have many ways, but it can always warm people in the dark.
爱有很多种形式，但总在黑暗中温暖人们
2．Walk the path of love and kindness, and joy will be your constant companion.
人生路上，爱与善良相伴，快乐将成为永恒之伴侣。
3．Sometimes giving from our need instead of our abundance is just what we need to do.
有时候给予我们所需的而不是富足的正是我们要做的。
4．Stepping out not only helped a brother in need, but also gave our kids the sweet taste of helping others.
挺身而出不仅帮助了一个有需要的兄弟，也让我们的孩子们品尝到了帮助别人的美好滋味。
5．We should pay more attention to the world where we live and appreciate how the human beings and animals live together. 我们应该更多地关注我们生活的世界，欣赏人类和动物是如何生活在一起的。
6．If it had been my dog, I'd hope that somebody would be willing to go that extra mile/trouble.
如果那是我的狗，我也希望有人愿意为它多费力气。
7．I think I am a much better person today than I used to be, and I hope I will not forget these experiences.
我觉得相比过去我如今是一个更好的自己并且我希望自己不会忘了这些经历。
8．It's such a privilege to be a part of these kids' lives, even just for a few hours, getting to know them and hearing their stories.
能成为这些孩子生活中的一部分真是太荣幸了，哪怕只有几个小时，了解他们，听他们的故事。
9．Looking back, I feel blessed someone had wanted to help a stranger.
回首往事，很幸运有人乐于帮助我这样一个陌生人。
10．One thing is for certain—Larry went above and beyond the call of duty by getting so close to the burning vehicle. His efforts most likely saved the woman's life.
有一点是肯定的： 拉里离着火的汽车如此之近，超出了职责范围。他的努力很可能救了那位女士的命。
【典题精析】
阅读下面的材料， 完成以下任务。
Artie hung up and told the driverless UNATS Robotics car to get him down to the railway station as fast as it could, angry with himself. He never imagined his exwife would call, especially after she had been away for so long a time.
His exwife. He hadn't thought of her in years. Well, months. Weeks, certainly. She'd been a brilliant computer scientist at the UNATS Robotics school at the University of Toronto. He could never forget the day they spent together. Their exchanging ideas, their heated discussion and their time filled with love. Of course, she was more talented and even got calls from the authorities. He was intentionally listening in but he overheard some, “The most advanced robot...”
After that, things became unusual. She was much busier and they seldom spoke to each other. May be that was the signs. Artie signed, looking at the busy motorway...
What happened next was miserable. She just left. Most importantly, she was not all by herself—their little daughter was in her belly. There was only a note, saying she would take good care of their baby. It was painful. Sometimes, he had crazy dream where he searched everywhere in vain for his little daughter. He woke up in the middle of the night, wondering if she would be as smart as her mom or if she got his blue eyes.
“We are arriving within 5 minutes.” the driverless UNATS Robotics car announced. Artie signed again. He longed to read her emails or listen in on her phone conversations. He could have done that when they were still together, but he never had. If he had, he would have found out what she was planning. He could have talked her out of it and maybe they were still together.
“And then what, Artie？” said the annoying voice in his head. “Maybe she was chasing her own dream—making the smartest robot in the world? ”
“Shut up！” he told the nagging voice.
注意：续写词数应为150左右。
In a flash, he was at the front gate of the railway station.__________________
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There she was, standing by a teenage girl who had the same blue eyes as his.__________________________________________________________________
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1．通读全文，本文文体为：
Narration记叙文
Argument议论文
Exposition说明文
2．一审——审要素
时态 | 一般过去时 | |
六要素 | When | for so long a time, in the middle of the night |
Where | Railway station__ | |
Who | Artie,__his__exwife,__their little daughter, the most advanced robot | |
What | Artie's exwife left a long time ago with the baby still in her belly. Artie didn't know the reason but he guessed maybe she was chasing her dream—making__the__smartest__robot__in__the__world. | |
Why | 续写内容：Why did Artie's exwife leave? | |
How | 第二段段首句：There she was, standing by a teenage girl who had the same blue eyes as his. | |
3.二定——定主题
主题：To achieve one's dream as well as serve the country is not easy. It needs devotion and understanding.
4．三推测——关注衔接，尤其是段首句定基调
(1)续写内容和原文的衔接
原文首段：
Artie hung up and told the driverless UNATS Robotics car to get him down to the railway station as fast as it could, angry with himself. He never imagined his exwife would call, especially after she had been away for so long a time.
可知，续写的内容应该集中于Artie和exwife 见面的场景。
(2)续写第一段和段首句的衔接
首先标出第一段段首句的关键词。
In a flash, he was__at__the__front__gate of the railway station.
说明Artie已经到达火车站，接下去应该描写到达车站之后发生的事情。
(3)续写第一段段末和第二段段首句的衔接
首先标出第二段段首句的关键词。
There__she__was,__standing by a__teenage__girl who had the__same__blue__eyes as his.
根据“There she was”可知，Artie 的exwife 已经到了。“a teenage girl who had the same blue eyes”可推测出这应该就是原文中的“女儿”。由此提示，下文应该有一家三口团聚。exwife 讲述忽然离开的原因。结合原文，最合理的原因应该是：响应国家的号召，并实现了梦想。
(4)续写第二段和段首句的衔接
根据第二段段首句可知，第一段的段末应该描写Artie 最终在车站找到他的exwife。既然留出一段描写这个场景，说明找到的过程并不那么直接。可以借助原文中“the most advanced robot”来展开故事。
5．四构思——每段3分天下
按照每段三个层次，构思每一段的情节：
第一段 | Artie不知道怎么找到exwife |
一个人形机器人出现了(the most advanced robot) | |
机器人做向导 | |
第二段 | 和exwife及女儿相认，并讲述消失原因——响应国家号召，完成梦想 |
一家人团聚并交谈互动 | |
升华：有关梦想、奉献和成就 |
6.发人深省的结尾
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One possible version：
It turned out that any flower of success came from devotion and sacrifice. But when it worked, it was simply beautiful—like the reunion of the family, together with the smartest robot.
